Drannic, it becomes exceedingly hard to keep up with all your guys... 12 characters is a little... too much, I think... but, who am I
Another thing is that your character is a little... Haralduresque...
(oh no! he said THE NAME!)
I mean, all basic destruction spells mastered? Like, being able to cast a near-molten stone rock encased in ice and propelled by lightning? Hmm...
And everyone can sense his power? None is more powerful than him in combat other than Retan? Well, we've never actually seen Retan fight all-out, have we?
Unknown essence? From your description, he's a Draken... I doubt that a creature with only "Draken heritage" would be able to transform into an actual full fledged dragon. Even the move's description states that it's basic for a *Draken*, but it doesn't say anything about a Draken halfling (or however much Draken he has in himself). Needless to say, he probably wouldn't be able to be as much of a full dragon as, say, Retan would be. Anything in between would be a little grotesque (imagine a gigantic dragon with, say, human legs...)
12 hours of invisibility? That's a whole chapter. So he flies around stealthed bombing towns and cities (and characters) without taking any damage?
Then again, I also have a character somewhat like that - Kronos. But all he does is sit in his castle and gives the occasional order to take over Gaian (again -_-), without actually doing much himself. Your character doesn't seem to control a particular faction - which leads me to suspect the worst (a rampaging god). Looking at his alliances, we see "all but Crimson Empire and Dark Empire" - so you created him to oppose the two? What was he doing before that? Why didn't he show his godlike powers before? He could've well started a cult around himself and tried to destroy the two empires 10 times over. Moreover, that effectively kills your excuse for having him being brought in from another dimension, if you were going to use that. How could he have, from his other dimension, learned of (and actually began to dislike) the Dark and Crimson empires? Why would a being of such power come to Gaian in the first place, just to destroy two empires out of spite? What I'm saying is that maybe you might want to spend a little time developing your character to the power level you describe (even to a small degree - for example, back in chapter 9, Kronos took 3 posts to mass-resurrect 8,000 zombies - now he can pretty much resurrect 10,000 in one, though that has never happened. As I said, he pretty much sits up in his tower and bosses people around, which is what Retan appears to be doing, as well).
Phew...
I'm not at all opposing the approval of your character, but I'm just saying that maybe, just maybe, you should... you know, spend some time on him. Maybe you won't even like the guy. What would you do then? You've already thrown in a god whose aura can be felt by anyone - so everyone notices it and it just vanishes...? Give it some time, let his character develop... Throwing a god into DAL this spontaneously is a little strange, I think. I mean, we've already got Jenia's rubber dude, who looks pretty bent on world domination... and trust me, omnipotent characters aren't as fun as we'd think them to Razz
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