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« on: November 07, 2004, 06:38:54 PM »
Here's the basic idea of the story I made that I'll eventually turn into a game.

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Millions of years ago, before life existed on earth, the gods created 6 magic blades: The Fire Blade, The Ice Blade, The Thunder Blade, The Aqua Blade, and The Dark Blade. Now, the gods fear the power of the dark blade, and decided to banish it to earth, before there is human life there. Years later, when humans are on earth, a dark spirit sends his minions to manipulate humans into finding the dark blade.

Eventually, a 14 year old boy, Aminaga Ragtunos, tries to use the divine powers of "The Blade of Champion" to try and defeat the dark spirit and destroy his dark blade, which killed his father in a war.

Aminaga seccsessfully destroys the dark spirit, and his blade, but not without getting frozen for 500 years. When Aminaga is freed, he attends to a
warrior training academy, where he goes of on a daring quest to use
The Blade of Champion's powers to reseal away the dark blade,
and make new friends along the way, including a mysterious mercenary, a female
warrior, and a mystical wizard.

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So, what do you think? Like it? Hate it? Love it?
Just give me a rating of something out of 5 stars.
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« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2004, 07:11:09 PM »
3 Stars

Because of the following

1-The story seems abit used up

2-His first quest is cooler then his main quest

3-No talking pie


But hey that's 60% more then my first game, so good job!
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« Reply #2 on: November 07, 2004, 07:59:22 PM »
2 stars

You said there are 6 swords when you only listed 5, probably a mistake on your part, but thats what it says. Unless the "Blade of Champion" is the blade not listed.

You should tell us how a 14 year old boy got a hold of the "Blade of Champions". That is, assuming that "to use the divine powers of "The Blade of Champion" to try and defeat the dark spirit and destroy his dark blade" means he's actually wielding the sword

So a 14 year old boy manages to defeat a dark spirit wielding a dark sword and gets frozen for 500 years, then he gets freed and attends a warrior training acadamy? If the kid was able to defeat a dark spirit using a legendary sword, I would already think he had some extensive training beforehand.

You fail to explain why he has to reseal the dark blade, and how did it get free?

Also the party seems kind of Cliche, but that isn't a problem with me
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« Reply #3 on: November 07, 2004, 08:01:42 PM »
Oh yeah, I just noticed that. Yeah what he said....Also get to work on adding that Talking Pie!

Wait, no!

The Talking Pie is in my games!

Get your own talking thing!
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« Reply #4 on: November 07, 2004, 08:02:39 PM »
I should be the story rater of Mystic Software >:D
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« Reply #5 on: November 07, 2004, 08:07:17 PM »
Yes you should. Will you give 1 star extra to those with Talking Pies?

I Copyright the Talking Pie Being In Games


Copyright Tim "Dude Man" Rowe November 7, 2004, 9:12 pm
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« Reply #6 on: November 08, 2004, 06:13:16 AM »
Okay, now that I'm back, I'm here to anwser all your questions!
If you were confused about the 7 god blades:
Fire Blade,
Ice Blade,
Thunder Blade,
Aqua Blade,
Wind Blade,
and Dark Blade,
then the only reason the Blade of Cahmpion isn't listed is because in the story, it was created after the 6 others.
Second: It's because Aminaga is...AHH! I almost gave away part of the major story plot! Sorry, but you'll have to wait until the game comes out. OR at least wait for the demo( if you want to help out, check out the RPG Code Shack
every once in a while.)
Third: There will be absolutly, NO TALKING PIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!
NO TALKING CAKES! NO TALKING PIZZAS! NO TALKING FOOD AT ALL!!!!!!!!!!!
Besides, I wound't want to copyright Dude Man's game.

And thanks for the ratings. I'll tell you guys more about the plot when the demos
come out one by one.
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« Reply #7 on: November 08, 2004, 02:55:08 PM »
Your NOT haveing talking food? Sheesh..


Well it sound like your game is probally going to be pretty good. But more like Dark Edge 1 or The Black Walkway 2 good.
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« Reply #8 on: November 08, 2004, 05:20:06 PM »
You still havn't explained why he would need to go to a warrior training academy after he defeated a dark spirit with a legendary sword
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« Reply #9 on: November 08, 2004, 06:16:00 PM »
Because I want it to find out when the game comes out. DUH!!!!!!!!

Also, Dude Man is right, there must be no talking food!
Does Dark Age have  talking food? No. Does Eternal Blade have talking food? No.
Does Gendin's Quest have talking food? No. Does any other game other then yours
have talking food? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*Erases memory of any non-living thing that talks!

Bye!
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« Reply #10 on: November 08, 2004, 09:12:43 PM »
Shit, where did my old game project come from!? Whoa! You actually suffered my old demo? HAHAHA!
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« Reply #11 on: November 08, 2004, 09:14:12 PM »
Fighter's Fury has no talking food... I'll have to fix that!
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« Reply #12 on: November 09, 2004, 05:48:36 AM »
People should stop using the young pre-teen to teenager that rises to power to defeat an ancient evil cliché, but thats just my opinion.

I'd say 2 out of 5 because you wouldn't reveal enough about the story line, but what you did reveal only pointed on 3 parts of the major story line (waking up after 500 years, going to an academy and meeting friends to help him destory the great evil).

Thats about all I have to stay. I'll still get the demo to test it out though. Your story may be a little rough around the edges, but the game might be decent.
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 When I\'m gone, You\'ll need love...To light the shadows on your face.\"

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 Well I hope there\'s someone out there...Who can bring me back to you.\"

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« Reply #13 on: November 09, 2004, 02:13:38 PM »
<_< Ehhh, if REALLY want to know spoilers in my game, just send me a private message about it so nobody else who dosen't won't be able to see.

Thanks for your doing so! Very Happy
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« Reply #14 on: November 09, 2004, 04:06:59 PM »
I'm not really a gamemaker myself, I'm more of a writer.
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\"Runaway with my heart...
 Runaway with my hope...
 If I could make you mine...I\'ll go whereever you will go.\"

\"So lately, I\'ve been wondering...
 Who will be there to take my place...
 When I\'m gone, You\'ll need love...To light the shadows on your face.\"

\"If a great wave should fall...
 It would fall upon us...
 Well I hope there\'s someone out there...Who can bring me back to you.\"

\"Way up high or down low...I\'ll go wherever you will go.\"

\"Runaway with my love.\"

In your heart and mind, I\'ll stay with you all of time...